Comments on: Locked Away

By: Clifford

Clifford — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 21:55:33 +0000

I thank all of you for the too kind comments you made. And, Kim, I think you’re right, I’ll have a look at the had’s in the first paragraph.

I’ve had tons of things on my to-do list but I’ll definitely get to reading your entries as soon as I can.

By: 2mara

2mara — Tue, 08 Dec 2009 23:33:22 +0000

The last line is perfect… and made tear up.
wonderfully written
~2

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Magenta Monster » Blog Archive » Other Flasher’s Stories — Mon, 07 Dec 2009 20:44:20 +0000

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By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Mon, 07 Dec 2009 00:57:43 +0000

Beautiful story, well written and touching.

By: Laurita

Laurita — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 14:37:31 +0000

Beautiful tale, beautifully told.

By: mazzz_in_Leeds

mazzz_in_Leeds — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 14:13:49 +0000

Awwww, very sweet.
You really get a sense of his curiosity mixed with some trepidation.
Was very much drawn into the story

By: Chance

Chance — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 12:36:40 +0000

A marvelous atmosphere created in this tale

Good stuff

By: Michelle

Michelle — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 05:30:02 +0000

I loved this story, it was mesmerizing ! Well written.

By: Shannon Esposito

Shannon Esposito — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 04:31:55 +0000

An Aunt that I love gave me her wedding wine glasses recently, until then I never understood the value of objects and the memories they held. This brings up those feelings, how things can serve as the catalyst for great memories. Thanks for sharing this.

By: Kim Batchelor

Kim Batchelor — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 01:18:43 +0000

Clifford, this is a very sweet story. If I may make a suggestion, your opening paragraph would be much stronger if you remove the ‘hads’ and use more active verbs–it should be an easy fix that would very much highlight your strong descriptions. Thanks for the read.