Comments on: Wolf and Twilight

By: purelycarrie

purelycarrie — Mon, 11 Jan 2010 14:20:02 +0000

Each wolf had a place in the whole and yet retained his individual personality. Perhaps it was some celestial link.
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Clifford, Hope to get to know such a wonderful soul.
~Carrie

By: Lisa

Lisa — Mon, 16 Nov 2009 13:06:20 +0000

Lovely story! Thought provoking and mysterious.

By: CJ

CJ — Thu, 17 Sep 2009 18:17:04 +0000

I love these kinds of stories. Thank you SO much for writing such a good one and sharing it. Great idea!

By: Chris Chartrand

Chris Chartrand — Thu, 17 Sep 2009 00:20:57 +0000

I feel like I have been sitting in a story circle on a brisk autumn night. You have done the legend of the hour of the wolf justice. Years ago an estimated 750,000 wolves called our county home. Now however, there are only a few places left where the wolf’s howl can be heard in the twilight. Great job. Sorry it took so long for me to visit. ~Chris

By: J. M. Strother

J. M. Strother — Wed, 16 Sep 2009 02:01:33 +0000

What a nice little mythos you’ve developed here. Nicely done.
~jon

By: Clifford

Clifford — Sun, 13 Sep 2009 12:10:14 +0000

Shannon, Leigh, and Dianne,

Thank you all for commenting. I agree, the language at the end doesn’t quite fit with the rest. I’ll play around with it and see what I can come up with that works better.

By: Dianne

Dianne — Sun, 13 Sep 2009 04:46:09 +0000

I have to agree with Leigh Barlow’s comments. I like the piece overall, but there is some language towards the end of the story that seems out of place.

By: Leigh Barlow

Leigh Barlow — Sat, 12 Sep 2009 16:20:34 +0000

You got the writing style exactly how it should be for these ‘mystical’ descriptions. My only thought was that ‘… is aware of both.’ felt out of place: too modern, maybe, or just not spiritual enough. Something like, ‘That is why at twilight you can still hear Wolf howling to express his joy and remorse at his two sides pull his heart in different directions.’

By: Shannon Esposito

Shannon Esposito — Sat, 12 Sep 2009 15:51:54 +0000

I like this concept of twilight. Well done, looking forward to reading more from you!

By: Clifford

Clifford — Sat, 12 Sep 2009 15:33:16 +0000

Anton, netta, and Laura,

Thank you all very much. I think #fridayflash will become a regular thing for me.

I’ll be making my way through the list of entries, reading and commenting, so I’ll be reading you soon!.